Score: 9

"Childish, no. Childlike, yes. And nifty, too."

submission: The Colors of Friendship

date: July 8, 2007

Childish is when someone acts bratty and immature. Childlike is when someone has that wonderful, playful, unjaded, "see the world the first time" quality.

Cute. Charming. Some big words for a small children's story, but it was still fun to read. I think you hit the bullseye for your target audience pretty neatly.

Thanks for sharing. Like a rainbow, it's a refreshing thing to see around here in Newgrounds.

Score: 5

"Not flyinig high, but not a crash and burn."

submission: Mario Believes he can Fly

date: May 25, 2007

As far as first tries go, this is better than average. Found it a big relief from the soundless stickman violencefests.

My suggestions for fixin' it?

If you're any good at remixing sound, see if you trim the song a bit. Short attention spans, you know.

Also at the end when the characters were flying... see if you can get the cloud pattern loop in the background to flow more seamlessly: when it kept cutting to the first set, it was kinda jarring.

Aside from that... keep perfecting your craft. You've got potential. I believe you can... well, you know... ;-P

Score: 6

"Cute... pretty funny."

submission: Movie Trailers 2

date: May 22, 2007

Not bad at all... at least it was written nicely. Work on the look, though.

Also, a little half second of "TV static" or "black screen" between skits would've been a good breaker between skits, to let Joe Newgrounds when they stop and start. Something to think about. :-)

Score: 6

"Your mother must be proud."

submission: Have a Happy Mothers Day

date: May 13, 2007

Cute. Simple. To the Point. Not an epic flash, but it does the job nicely. I hope she enjoyed it.

Score: 9

"MUCH better than a whomp on the head ;-P"

submission: Bunneh FuFu

date: April 17, 2007

Plus: Great graphics and look! I'da had no clue this was your first entry ever.

-- Great quick story line... and a fiendish plot twist.

-- A hoot!

Minus: What? No sing-along with the original song?

All the same, I hope the Good Fairy gives you something special for this one. :-)

Score: 3

"I want to like it, but..."

submission: DeathArena

date: February 16, 2007

I'm sorry, amigo, you actually put in some heart and thought in the story, and it's better than my usual Blam of the Day, and the music was a good choice...

But... the text runs by a bit fast, and pictorally... it just ain't there. I hope you can work on the art and the look, or get on good terms on a good graphics artist.

Don't give up, though. Keep working on it.

Score: 6

"Funny but..."

submission: "Chinese Food"

date: February 14, 2007

You lost points due to inaccuracy. Weird Al did NOT compose or sing that one... check his catalog on his website if you want to make sure. Also, the lyrics on screen on the second chorus didn't match what was sung.

Aside from that... looked nice, properly timed, and was funny. Just fix the glinches, and you'll have yourself a winner.

Score: 5

"Ah, so-so"

submission: Project Red Ninja

date: February 8, 2007

Ninjas are cool... and you can't miss with a ParagonX9 track most times...

And I thought the circles for limbs style was decent.

But I was looking for something with more plot, something that makes me get into Mr. Red Ninja, and his story. Not just a simple brawl with no names or reason behind it.

You did decently on the first run, but please develop it more next time. And keep on sending 'em in.

Score: 9

"WOOOOO! (holds up lit Zippo lighter)"

submission: Idoll

date: February 8, 2007

Now THAT'S how you do an entrance! You obviously perfected the art until you felt it was ready. Great art, and a nifty tune, and I like the gentle feather theme.

Just a few things that I felt held it back:

***A few repeat spots of the same animation as filler (her shaking her booty, and her feet stepping across the stage, f'rinstance). I know Filmation and DiC did that, and you can get away with it if it's brief enough, but it didn't escape MY eye.

***No subtitles. I would've liked reading the Japanese lyrics and/or their English translation, or being able to toggle them on or off. That would've scored 10s across the board.

All the same... you smacked this first one clear out of the park! ENCORE! ^_^y

Score: 8

"A one-shot thingy... but it hit the bullseye."

submission: Up Yours, Boston

date: February 1, 2007

Well, first the bad news... it's pretty topical to a single news event, and I'm afraid the relevance will fade as soon as the media find another thing to get its boxer briefs in a knot over.

Also, a small credit to the side for the animator voices, and the band Disturbed would've been appropriate.

But it was very well crafted, poignant, sharp, and witty. And throw in a bust of Martin Van Buren FTW.

Nicely done.